Fantasy of You

I'm in search of the constructive. The reason I declined the sales was because I felt something was off with it. However, since you simply looked to satisfy some immature ...

This is instantly forgettable fluff with a pastoral and conversational tone sprinkled throughout. It wanders randomly towards an end-goal only the writer must find satisfying. The secret is the key ...

The Queen Daughter grabbed the chalice filled with a bitter port and took a large swig. Careful of your word choices. 'grabbed' and 'large swig' give the impression she's a ...

Welcome to the Black Parade.

Abandon it, would be my 100% honest advice on it. I get the reason why people write fanfic. and so I'm not debating it. But when you can't stick to ...

As a rating, R is extremely exaggerated. There's mild swearing, and nothing more. Just thought I'd be on the safe side, what with all the very young writers My Friend ...

I hate this stuff, lol. It might work, but I don't see how it could be more productive than beginning your story. It's all procrastination.

I don't have too much time right now, but something jumped out at me pretty quickly. He was walking the corridors of the prison. He had on shoes-- he couldn’t ...

but i have a real bad problem with writer's block. I bet the problem is that you use writer's block as an excuse, lol. Pick up a pen, write down ...

Dream is if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today. Used to be a favourite quote, until I realised living as if I would die tended to bring ...

Thanks, lol. 'Golly jeepers you've made me feel so gosh darn special!'

The hook = idea = part of my point.

Will do, thanks.

The description + story-like first few stanzas are purposeful. I guess it's hit and me. Most have liked it, actually. But I'll take in on board.

Okay, first of all, trident, if you're going to attempt to be all knowing in the future, at least give improvements for what you say. Other wise, it comes out ...